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Apple, ice-cream, grape, cherry

All safely enveloped in-

ahydrochloricacidbox

Swirling and curling

Crushing the artery, and freezing the brain

Brain

Freeze


Inch by inch

Morph the organ

To frozen H2O - - -

And then shatter

Into a million tiny pieces

Each warping to its’ own

Multidimensionalvortex

A whirling mass of fluidity

That wanderlusts the most

And leaves me gasping.
MY FIRST DD! :'D

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Brain Freeze by MiniJacksonDiAngelo We have all been here, but not so elegantly as this. ( Featured by GrimFace242 )
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shehrozeameen Mar 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:) You deserve the DD for this one.

I personally found it cute, honest, a bit on the funny side, and even tangibly unique for the simple reason that its straightforward. Its a well written piece frankly speaking, and I don't have much to critique or comment on it. Its straightforward and it does the job well.

:thumbsup: do keep writing.
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
Thank you :'D Meow :3 Huggle! 
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shehrozeameen Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Anytime :) Stay happy
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
Thank youuuu :)
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shehrozeameen Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:) You're welcome.
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
^.^
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shehrozeameen Mar 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:dummy: She's happy
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
Yayayayyay
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Jester-of-Kings Feb 3, 2014  Student Writer
Brilliant and articulate. That's some good writing right there.
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MiniJacksonDiAngelo Feb 3, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you, Jester. 
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