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Apple, ice-cream, grape, cherry

All safely enveloped in-

ahydrochloricacidbox

Swirling and curling

Crushing the artery, and freezing the brain

Brain

Freeze


Inch by inch

Morph the organ

To frozen H2O - - -

And then shatter

Into a million tiny pieces

Each warping to its’ own

Multidimensionalvortex

A whirling mass of fluidity

That wanderlusts the most

And leaves me gasping.
MY FIRST DD! :'D

Improvements are appreciated!
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Brain Freeze by MiniJacksonDiAngelo We have all been here, but not so elegantly as this. ( Featured by inknalcohol )
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:) You deserve the DD for this one.

I personally found it cute, honest, a bit on the funny side, and even tangibly unique for the simple reason that its straightforward. Its a well written piece frankly speaking, and I don't have much to critique or comment on it. Its straightforward and it does the job well.

:thumbsup: do keep writing.
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
MiniJacksonDiAngelo Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you :'D Meow :3 Huggle! 
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:iconshehrozeameen:
shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Anytime :) Stay happy
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
MiniJacksonDiAngelo Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Student Writer
Thank youuuu :)
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:iconshehrozeameen:
shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:) You're welcome.
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
MiniJacksonDiAngelo Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Student Writer
^.^
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:iconshehrozeameen:
shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:dummy: She's happy
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
MiniJacksonDiAngelo Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Student Writer
Yayayayyay
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Jester-of-Kings Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Student Writer
Brilliant and articulate. That's some good writing right there.
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
MiniJacksonDiAngelo Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you, Jester. 
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ScathachLongmane Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Possibly the most fun I've ever had reading a poem on DA.  Thank you!
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
MiniJacksonDiAngelo Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it! 
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:iconmarsourire:
MarSourire Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
What the heck did I just read xDD
Didn't get what this was about at first hahaha
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
MiniJacksonDiAngelo Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Student Writer
XD Read the heading.
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:iconmarsourire:
MarSourire Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
That's exactly what I did after reading the whole thing lololol
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
MiniJacksonDiAngelo Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Student Writer
XD
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Time-Signature Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Student General Artist
Absolutely lovely~
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
MiniJacksonDiAngelo Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you ;-;
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Time-Signature Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Student General Artist
Np
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:iconluvleo:
luvleo Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
a ma zing
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
MiniJacksonDiAngelo Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much!
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:iconworldwar-tori:
WorldWar-Tori Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014   General Artist
Congratulations on the DD,
awesome writing :clap:
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
MiniJacksonDiAngelo Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you!
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:iconworldwar-tori:
WorldWar-Tori Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014   General Artist
No problem :heart:
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
MiniJacksonDiAngelo Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Student Writer
La la la la Meow :3 
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TruthisTruth Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations on the Daily Deviation! :clap:
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
MiniJacksonDiAngelo Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! :'D
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TruthisTruth Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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StarfieldDemise Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I am never going to eat ice cream again.
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
MiniJacksonDiAngelo Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Student Writer
Hahahahahahahahahhaha.
NO.
I love ice cream ;-;.
EAT EAT EAT.

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StarfieldDemise Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
bUT I'M SCURRED TO NOW. ;;

this was really cool thooough. ;v;
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
MiniJacksonDiAngelo Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! :'D

BUT EAT ALL THE ICE CREAM.
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:iconstarfielddemise:
StarfieldDemise Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem. ;v;

I'LL TRY BUT I'M CHUBBY ENOUGH AS IT IS.

Also thank you for the watch~ >v< :iconletmehugyouplz:
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
MiniJacksonDiAngelo Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Student Writer
Meh, chubby people are awesome.

No problemo!
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:iconstarfielddemise:
StarfieldDemise Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Llama Emoji-10 (Shy) [V1]  I'm not though. ;w;
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
MiniJacksonDiAngelo Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Student Writer
"Who says, who says you're not awesome."

Not the exact lyrics, but meh...
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Student Writer
:hug:

You're new to the site and already got a DD. I am so, so proud of you :3
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
MiniJacksonDiAngelo Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Student Writer
AWE, IAN, THANK YOU Huggle! :'DDDD
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MatthewKoon Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014
I enjoyed the imagery :)
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
MiniJacksonDiAngelo Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you!
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robson666 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist
congratulations to the well deserved Daily Deviation
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
MiniJacksonDiAngelo Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so so much!
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD, i love the way you wrote it ! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :party:
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:iconminijacksondiangelo:
MiniJacksonDiAngelo Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! :'D
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure! :heart:
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